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Topic ID: 11032
#0, lions fill me with pride and might
Posted by mengcomment on Jan-08-09 at 05:44 PM
I love painting and write poems variantly, when I feel the moment is just "right". I love to express my emotions through media as they best fit, and I so found that poems very much manifest emotions I felt while painting through the media of text. To give you an example I posted the lion here.


28”x36” acrylic on canvas

lions fill me with pride and might

when I look at the zodiac's bright sky at night I can see how they prance through their path when the sun rises high. And the birds fill the sky whose shadows horrify all the hiding insects on the sunbaked earth scurrying swiftly below the lions fur. As the lion marches over the remains of a perished goat that was yesterday slain, looking round and around 360 degrees for the hunter that entered the lions terrains. Yet intruders remain and the lion reveals as binoculars eye on his noble crown, silhouettes of twelve humans one driving a jeep as they target the king of the roaring sound.

It still is a wonder of natures grace, a cat crying out in the deserts of hell, the species human loves visit this place as big cats like these may die out as well. And here they stand opposite eye to the eye as silence emerges to intensify the chirp of crickets surrounding the scene where man again chose to intervene with the ways of nature, cruel as they seem.

For me and most people the lion remains what man should not touch for this world's sake, a majestic creature god chose to create that stays all above us as starlight reveals.


Meng Qiu
you can contact me through: www.mengcomment.com

p.s. I am thankful for all feedback positive and negative


#1, RE: lions fill me with pride and mi
Posted by Suvi on Jan-10-09 at 00:27 AM
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I really like your lion, the use of colour is very viberant but not gawdy, You have made the lions eyes really pop I think that may be what helps to balance the colours as well, he looks very proud, This is a very intriging painting.

#2, RE: lions fill me with pride and mi
Posted by TJKruse on Jan-10-09 at 12:51 PM
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i like the colors and style but don't care too much for the straight-in-front pose. I do like the poetry a lot.

#3, RE: lions fill me with pride and mi
Posted by kram on Jan-18-09 at 00:36 AM
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Love the colors, would love to see this one in person

I think you got overdescriptive on the poem, but the concept is nice. If you could shorten it, that is, say more with less words, I think it would flow much smoother and really compliment the painting.

Very cool!